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#2
Posted 24 February 2010 - 11:21 PM
back to the point I love it. Especially the pencil sketch. It makes me feel all warm and fuzzy! Your shading and detail work on the barn is phenomenal. Just gorgeous. Makes me want to pick up a pencil and sketch pad again!
#3
Posted 24 February 2010 - 11:37 PM
as far as the logo/lable I thought the white space could be the color of the bottle showing through w/ a clear label. I should make a version with a brown/dark amber color behind it.
#4
Posted 25 February 2010 - 01:09 AM
Also i'm not a fan of the font you used, it fits the style... but maybe it needs to be bolder, or centered without the stroke. the kerning is not very tight also especially the "w s"
Needs some tweeks, but i think it has good potencial
#5
Posted 25 February 2010 - 01:56 AM
#7
Posted 25 February 2010 - 06:55 PM
Maybe just changing to caps would help the font issue. Personally, I find that it's a font style that doesn't lend itself well to mixed case. The letter/word spacing does seem a bit sparse.
The oval is drawing attention away from the other elements in the design. The thick and thin isn't re-enforcing shape of the font or other elements. When I changed it to a single (horizontal) oval (...boring... I know) everything jumped into place and the visual focus shifted to the truck, complimenting it's shape.
When I did a horizontal flip on the truck it seemed to make more sense cause the angle of the truck and the offset lettering became complimentary.
You might wanna think about how the label will be die-cut. What that might add or take away from the design.
Anyways, don't stop. Will be nice to see the final version.
Edited by websmythe, 25 February 2010 - 07:00 PM.
#9
Posted 25 February 2010 - 09:08 PM
Like the design. The illustration is rad. The major structure is there, just seems to need some finishing. Hope ya don't mind, I played with it a bit to test out my thoughts.
Maybe just changing to caps would help the font issue. Personally, I find that it's a font style that doesn't lend itself well to mixed case. The letter/word spacing does seem a bit sparse.
The oval is drawing attention away from the other elements in the design. The thick and thin isn't re-enforcing shape of the font or other elements. When I changed it to a single (horizontal) oval (...boring... I know) everything jumped into place and the visual focus shifted to the truck, complimenting it's shape.
When I did a horizontal flip on the truck it seemed to make more sense cause the angle of the truck and the offset lettering became complimentary.
You might wanna think about how the label will be die-cut. What that might add or take away from the design.
Anyways, don't stop. Will be nice to see the final version.
Yeah I've been playing with alot of the elements. I wasn't really pleased with the oval but it worked better then the circle. I may add some hops or something to it maybe rework the enclosed-ness?? of it. LOL..
Illustration is very tight, type unfortunately isn't. I would really like to see the typography polished out, there are some kerning issues in the word "yeast" and I wouldn't recommend using more than 3 periods. I hope these comments help. Best Wishes.
Yeah the typo sucks ass.. LOL I didn't even mess with the kerning at all really. Like I said earlier I was looking at it last night and thinking to my self Why the heck didn't you spend any time on the text..LOL I think I was just tired and said what the heck. haha
#10
Posted 26 February 2010 - 05:49 PM
Maybe a darker brown for the type?
Would like to see it with a regular circle instead of an ellipse frame.
Overall not bad.. came out pretty good i must say. keep with it man.
Btw i got a chilli company im doing a logo for.. i might post that on here we'll see.
#11
Posted 26 February 2010 - 06:19 PM
Hmm.. dont have time for a complete summary most people hit on things i would say. Check your kerning when you have time. Maybe a different font in whole... not sure though.
Maybe a darker brown for the type?
Would like to see it with a regular circle instead of an ellipse frame.
Overall not bad.. came out pretty good i must say. keep with it man.
Btw i got a chilli company im doing a logo for.. i might post that on here we'll see.
I've desided to just draw out my own lettering but will change the name. I'm also going to make it more of a rectangle shape instead of circular.
I say post up the chilli stuff. I'd like to see it.
#12
Posted 26 February 2010 - 07:19 PM
Of course, in order to properly critique the final product, we should probably all get a free sample of the beer...
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#13
Posted 26 February 2010 - 08:39 PM
Good job! The pencil drawing is very impressive! I like the first logo better, but I agree that the font looks a little "off" on the top line.
Of course, in order to properly critique the final product, we should probably all get a free sample of the beer...
LOL I'd love a sample of the beer as well.
I do plan on making my own beer but I need to do some reading first.
#14
Posted 27 February 2010 - 05:41 PM
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#15
Posted 01 March 2010 - 06:16 PM
@Coy: Me too! I attended a homebrewing class a while ago for free, offered by a local homebrewer's club. You may want to check and see if they offer anything like that in your community.
I may have to look into that.. But I have a member here helping me along the way. starting with a book. The new complete homebrewers guide or something like that..great read so far. but I haven't got to read a whole lot of it because of other commitments, like life in general. LOL
Then I found a GREAT forum called homebrewtalk. great site with alot of information and not on just brewing your own beer but mead, wine, rootbear ect..
#18
Posted 05 April 2010 - 01:44 PM
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